If you'd like a review, please paste the draft (or a specific section) here! In the meantime, here is a quick checklist to see if your draft is hitting the right marks for this theme: 1. The "Timestamp" Mechanic
Since I don't have the text of your draft yet, I can't give you a specific critique. However, the title suggests a structured, chronological exploration of a relationship or a life.
Are the timestamps just dates, or do they signify emotional turning points?
Does the formatting stay the same throughout (e.g., October 2012 vs. 10/12/12 )?
The space between timestamps often tells a story. If there is a five-year jump, does the reader feel the weight of that missing time? 2. Showing "Unconditional"
Does the "love" look different in the first timestamp versus the last? It should ideally evolve from infatuation or idealism into something more weathered and resilient.